Feedback for Cyn

To those who've read my book, thank you so much for taking the time. It means a lot!

I'm working on a new manuscript and covet your insight and feedback.

My goal wasn't to write a complicated novel, but a simple story to entertain. A fun escape. Did I accomplish that goal?

What did you like? What didn't you like? What sections/components were confusing?

How was the length? Was it difficult to keep track of the characters? What characters did you like best? Least?

What should I keep in mind as I work on the next project?

Add anything you'd like.

It is humbling that you cared enough to read my first attempt at fiction, I know it's not perfect. If you could take the time to help me out I would be very grateful.

You can post your feedback here, private message me on Facebook or email me at: jerry@jrhetrick.com

For those unaware I had a book, and are interested, go to amazon.com and type in jerry hetrick - Cyn is the name of the book and it will be the top link.

A deeply humble, thank you,
Jerry

Race

During the super bowl, Pepsi Max aired a commercial where a wife was upset with her husband for his eating habits. She disliked, and changed, everything he consumed. Finally she agreed with one choice, Pepsi Max, but when he noticed a pretty girl, she threw her can at her husband, he ducked, the can hit the girl, knocked her out and the couple left apologizing.

I found it funny, a little on the dark side, but funny. I saw it as a spot on how women misunderstand men and how they want them to be different. For the past few days, radio talk shows have been talking about the fact that it was a black woman hitting a white woman. A public official from Texas is offended (I don't remember who she is, nor do I care).

I can honestly say I was surprised, in my initial recollection, I couldn't have told you the couple was black. It was a simple play on women's misunderstanding of men in a humorous way.

I realize no one will see my little blog post, but for anyone who's counting, I saw no color in this ad.